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Okay deviants, I'm putting out the general call: I need alpha readers for a graphic novel project; anyone who would be interested in the material and willing to give honest feedback. Let me break it down.

Some of you are familiar with my creator-owned property "The Adventures of Echo Callaway"; if not, here's what I've posted here in the last few years: adammasterman.deviantart.com/g… I've played with this property in a number of ways over the years, with many false starts, but now I'm dedicating 2015 to a very specific goal: a finished graphic novel, the first installment of Echo, Hiro and Sati's long, strange adventure. Commissions and freelance jobs are officially closed; I've literally cleared everything off my plate, and I'm already up to my elbows in Echo.

How much have I done so far? The entire book is plotted in significant detail, broken up into chapters (17 total). About half of those chapters are further broken down panel by panel and page by page.  Four chapters are fully thumb nailed, and three of those chapters have been cleaned up and lettered (I write my final dialogue after I draw layouts, basically as I'm lettering). And the first chapter is completely finished, colors and all. That's where I stand today, Jan. 23rd, 2015.

Where am I going from here? I'm going to keep moving forward with breaking down the plot specifics; 10 hours will probably finish that task for me. And I'll keep moving forward with thumb nailing, and then cleaning up and lettering, each chapter. That will take longer, probably until midyear at some point. I intend to have the entire book laid out and lettered before I continue with finishes; I'm still experimenting a bit with inking and coloring styles, and I want to do those steps all at once, to keep the look of the book consistent.

Where do you all come in? Excellent question! :) What I am looking for is a modest audience to read the draft chapters (lettered and cleaned-up sketch pages), and give me whatever feedback you think I need to hear. A lot of people use webcomiking for this, but I don't want to wait until each page is finished (and represents a lot of work to change) before I get the story feedback I need. So, if you are game, here is how it will work:

Send me a note with an email address, telling me you'd like to be an alpha reader. I'll add your name to the mailing list, and every time I finish a chapter, I'll send a pdf out to the group en masse.

That's pretty much it. Any feedback you want to share with me, just reply to the same address. No obligation to respond at all, or to write anything at length; I'm not asking for free editors, just people who might enjoy the work anyway to get an early look, and respond when they feel inclined. If you have been into the Echo comics and art I've been posting here, or just graphic noveling in general, just drop me a line. This invite is open to all; in about a week, I'll be sending out the first three chapters, so just get to me before then. And thanks in advance to anyone who wants to pitch in; I'm hoping it will be fun for those who participate, but its also a big help to me, one I will definitely appreciate. Okay, that's all, Adam out.  :)
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I really want to love Black Science, but...
Gorgeous design, fun concept (and a writer with the chops to give it depth), unquestionably talented artist, independent, creator-owned; this book was conceived to be my new favorite monthly. And now, 11 issues in, I’ve probably bought my last issue (sad face). Why? Glad you asked:

First of all, after 11 issues, I’m ready to concede that the gorgeous artwork is practically unreadable. Scalera is brilliant, not question, and his compositional chops rival Canete’s. But somewhere between the (awesomely) distorted figures, the unusual p.o.v.s, and the too heavy texturing, the work nearly loses its graphic quality. By which I mean, it often takes a second or two to figure out what you are looking at *each panel*. If this were an art book or portfolio, that would probably be a plus (its definitely visually striking), but as comics, it’s basically a fail. There is no panel to panel continuity if you add in those pauses, and when I find myself skimming over the sections without dialogue, it’s a good sign that the storytelling has broken down.

Colorist Dean White *could* salvage this; I’ve seen other colorists take hard to “read” pictures and make them much more clear and graphic (Lichtner over Joe Mad in Ultimates 3, a generally awful book but the colors definitely clarify Mad’s increasingly loose pencil work). But his style seems to be an attempt to out-do Scalera; he introduces *more* texture, more rendering, and while the results are gorgeous, they are generally (from the side-by-sides I’ve seen) *less* readable than the black-and-white. The result is pages that simply don’t flow together and become a visual narrative; it becomes something the reader has to laboriously assemble, and, in my experience, 90% of the fun is lost by the time you “get it”.

Remender certainly knows how to write a comic, but he has some surprising holes in his game here that add more holes to the boat. I’m not the first person to mention it, but too many of the characters are completely depthless. Grant and Kadir are interesting throughout, but the rest vary from vaguely distinguishable to complete cardboard cut-outs. I can’t even think of Grant’s girlfriend’s name, even though she finally got some mildly interesting backstory in one of the latter issues. Part of what Remender seems to be trying is the whole “George R.R. Martin” technique, where seemingly central characters dies at surprising times, but it’s an awful flop when you have nothing invested in the character, a failed imitation of the gut-wrenching Martin does to readers (over and over again). I’m not sure if its the over-reliance on internal monologue (which I *do* find annoying), or just a style-over-substance thing, but these characters are bland and un-engaging, which robs the story of most of its emotional impact.

The book could still turn a corner; Scalera is relatively young, and his art has evolved dramatically over his brief career, so a year from now he might have found the balance between clarity and energy. And Remender’s characters might come alive given enough time and circumstance. For now, however, it’s time for me to admit, to myself, that reading Black Science (and trying to like it) is a chore, and I need a break.
Okay deviants, I'm putting out the general call: I need alpha readers for a graphic novel project; anyone who would be interested in the material and willing to give honest feedback. Let me break it down.

Some of you are familiar with my creator-owned property "The Adventures of Echo Callaway"; if not, here's what I've posted here in the last few years: adammasterman.deviantart.com/g… I've played with this property in a number of ways over the years, with many false starts, but now I'm dedicating 2015 to a very specific goal: a finished graphic novel, the first installment of Echo, Hiro and Sati's long, strange adventure. Commissions and freelance jobs are officially closed; I've literally cleared everything off my plate, and I'm already up to my elbows in Echo.

How much have I done so far? The entire book is plotted in significant detail, broken up into chapters (17 total). About half of those chapters are further broken down panel by panel and page by page.  Four chapters are fully thumb nailed, and three of those chapters have been cleaned up and lettered (I write my final dialogue after I draw layouts, basically as I'm lettering). And the first chapter is completely finished, colors and all. That's where I stand today, Jan. 23rd, 2015.

Where am I going from here? I'm going to keep moving forward with breaking down the plot specifics; 10 hours will probably finish that task for me. And I'll keep moving forward with thumb nailing, and then cleaning up and lettering, each chapter. That will take longer, probably until midyear at some point. I intend to have the entire book laid out and lettered before I continue with finishes; I'm still experimenting a bit with inking and coloring styles, and I want to do those steps all at once, to keep the look of the book consistent.

Where do you all come in? Excellent question! :) What I am looking for is a modest audience to read the draft chapters (lettered and cleaned-up sketch pages), and give me whatever feedback you think I need to hear. A lot of people use webcomiking for this, but I don't want to wait until each page is finished (and represents a lot of work to change) before I get the story feedback I need. So, if you are game, here is how it will work:

Send me a note with an email address, telling me you'd like to be an alpha reader. I'll add your name to the mailing list, and every time I finish a chapter, I'll send a pdf out to the group en masse.

That's pretty much it. Any feedback you want to share with me, just reply to the same address. No obligation to respond at all, or to write anything at length; I'm not asking for free editors, just people who might enjoy the work anyway to get an early look, and respond when they feel inclined. If you have been into the Echo comics and art I've been posting here, or just graphic noveling in general, just drop me a line. This invite is open to all; in about a week, I'll be sending out the first three chapters, so just get to me before then. And thanks in advance to anyone who wants to pitch in; I'm hoping it will be fun for those who participate, but its also a big help to me, one I will definitely appreciate. Okay, that's all, Adam out.  :)

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Dadapan Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Man, I adore your linework! So much motion!
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AdamMasterman Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014
Awesome,man; muchas gracias.
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Dadapan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
De nada :)
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Robo-Shark Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Incredible work, absolutely love the energy in your art.
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ToryWarlockTheDog Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
your art looks so cool ;v;
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oTroisiemeOeilo Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Professional Filmographer
Thank you so much for the watch! I'm so moved!
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AdamMasterman Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
No problem; glad I found you.  You have great stuff, very fun style.
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drawmokie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Professional Artist
draw mokie
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Thanks for watching me!
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